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讀后續(xù)寫,作為高考新題型,非??简瀸W(xué)生的閱讀理解能力、綜合概括能力、邏輯分析能力以及想象力。想要寫好并不容易,下面以 the Sea's Surprise 一題為范文,分解步驟,詳細(xì)分析。
【題 目】
閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
The Sea’s Surprise
Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for an adventure. They joked that some day they would find a talking fish or a mermaid or a bottle with a treasure map inside. So far they had only found shells and rocks and seaweed. Today though was different. The boys felt excited.
Sea crabs scampered on the rocks. Up one side and down the other. They were quick and lively. The tide didn’t seem to ever wash them away. Then Jim saw a fish. It was stranded on the beach, just flopping around.
“Can it talk?” Andy asked.
“It looks like any other fish,” Jim said. He picked it up gently and carried it to the water.
“Do you think it will grant us any wishes?” Andy laughed.
The boys watched as the silver fish sped off through the water. “No. Maybe next time.” Jim grinned.
As the two friends walked farther down the beach they came upon a bottle. It was green with a cork in the mouth.
“Our luck will change. Does it have a map inside or a genie?” joked Andy.
Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. He rubbed it. Nothing happened. He pulled on the cork. Nothing happened. He shook it. Nothing happened.
“ Try the cork again. I bet the genie is waiting for us to release him. Or we’ll find a treasure map and have a real adventure,” Jim exclaimed.
Andy tugged again on the cork. He wiggled it back and forth. He twisted it around and around. Finally it popped out without breaking. Andy shook the bottle. Nothing came out. Looking inside he couldn’t see anything. Jim looked too and shook his head. Empty.
“It’s just an old wine bottle,” Jim complained. He grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand.
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.至少使用5個短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語;
3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好;
4.續(xù)寫完成后,請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Para.1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces...
Para.2: Two boys ran after it...
續(xù)寫詳細(xì)步驟
一
第一次閱讀獲取基本信息
1.歸納基本信息
2.理清故事情節(jié)
Jim和Andy想在海邊尋寶→挽救了一條擱淺的魚→碰到了一個瓶子→???
Beginning: Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for treasure.
→Jim saw a stranded fish on the beach.
→Jim picked the fish gently and carried it into the water.
→They walked farther down the beach and came upon a bottle.
→Andy reached down and picked up the bottle.
→He rubbed the bottle, pulled on the cork and shook the bottle.Nothing happened.
→Jim grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand.
→The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces.
→Climax:?
→Two boys ran after it.
→Ending:?
二
第二次閱讀獲取情節(jié)發(fā)展線索
1.梳理續(xù)寫邏輯:細(xì)讀兩段續(xù)寫的開頭語,理順續(xù)寫段落間的邏輯關(guān)系
Para.1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces.
What was in the broken bottle?
What did Jim and Andy do?
What happened to the broken bottle?
Para.2:Two boys ran after it.
Why did the boys run after it?
What did they find later?
Where was the stranded fish saved by Jim?
2.歸納總結(jié)關(guān)鍵詞:圍繞劃定的10個關(guān)鍵詞,合理創(chuàng)新故事情節(jié)
felt excited, stranded—感受與狀態(tài)
silver—顏色
treasure, bottle—重要事物
picked up, waiting for, shook the bottle, complained—動作
back and forth—方式
將關(guān)鍵詞歸類后,可以判斷事物中的bottle在續(xù)寫時必須使用,其他詞可選擇性使用。
三
預(yù)測情節(jié)發(fā)展
Paragraph 1:根據(jù)畫線詞picked up, silver, bottle可構(gòu)思本段細(xì)節(jié):瓶子碎了,Andy和Jim看見一把銀(silver)鑰匙掉在地上,Andy彎腰想拾起(pick up)鑰匙。突然瓶子(bottle)又完好如初,鑰匙又回到里面了。
Paragraph 2:根據(jù)畫線詞felt excited, treasure和stranded可構(gòu)思本段細(xì)節(jié):兩個孩子跟著瓶子跑。他們進(jìn)入海里時沒有下沉而是漂浮在海上。他們感到很興奮(felt excited)。瓶子把他們帶到一個島嶼附近,那兒有很多財寶——是那條擱淺(stranded)的魚來報恩的。
四
羅列提綱要點
Paragraph 1:
hit a rock and shattered into many pieces;
saw a long, silver key;
bent over to pick up the key;
came together to form a bottle;
began rolling slowly toward the sea;
Paragraph 2:
ran after;
entered the sea;
floated on the surface;
followed the bottle;
took as much as possible;
五
檢查謄寫
Paragraph 1:
The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. Both Andy and Jim gasped as they saw a long, silver key on the ground in the glass pieces. Then they looked at each other. Why didn’t it make any noise when they shook the bottle? Why didn’t they see it? Andy bent over to pick up the key. Suddenly the glass pieces came together to form a bottle again. The key was mysteriously back inside! And the bottle began rolling slowly toward the sea.
Paragraph 2:
Two boys ran after it. When they entered the sea, astonishingly they didn’t sink into the water but floated on the surface of it. They felt excited. They followed the bottle and then it stopped near an island where there was lots of treasure like diamonds and stones. “You can take as much as possible,” a voice came from the coast where a talking fish was swimming. It was the stranded fish that Jim saved and put back into the water.
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